STAR: I LIKE YOU ADJECTIVES
STAR: I LIKE HOW YOU USED YOUR EMOTION TOWARDS THE BLANKET
WISH: YOU ARE NOT REALLY TALKING ABOUT THE BLANKET YOU ARE TALKING ABOOUT BOXING
* : Good description
* : I could imagine it in my head
EBI : no 😀
: Ally = you could have said path way because
: it could meant life and tunnelling through the blanket as you were trying to portray
kashyap I like that your knukles are soft and that you are powerful with your blanket but keep coooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
Kayshap you have used some incredibly powerful simile and imagery in your poem to emphasise the importance of your blanket, well done. Now consider how rhythm can contribute to a poem.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
STAR: I LIKE YOU ADJECTIVES
STAR: I LIKE HOW YOU USED YOUR EMOTION TOWARDS THE BLANKET
WISH: YOU ARE NOT REALLY TALKING ABOUT THE BLANKET YOU ARE TALKING ABOOUT BOXING
Good use of similes(Star)
Great adjectives(Star)
You could try to make it more like a poem(Wish)
* : Good description
* : I could imagine it in my head
EBI : no 😀
: Ally = you could have said path way because
: it could meant life and tunnelling through the blanket as you were trying to portray
very good overall 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀
kashyap I like that your knukles are soft and that you are powerful with your blanket but keep coooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
@Kashyap : I liked the way you have personified your blanket. Good usage of similies and adjectives.
Kayshap you have used some incredibly powerful simile and imagery in your poem to emphasise the importance of your blanket, well done. Now consider how rhythm can contribute to a poem.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M