Great stuff Jayanna, what a fabulous twist to your response to this week’s prompt and I love how you used a question to leave me wondering what happens next; this is the sign of a talented writer!
Remember to check your verbs are all in the correct tense.
Miss A
Well done Jayanna. I really liked reading your response to this week’s prompt. It was an imaginative piece and you used the prompt in a creative way. I liked some of the descriptive words that you used and I think you hooked the reader. I would like to know how the story ends and why there are two babies in the photo. One small thing that I picked up on was that ‘father’s office’ would need an apostrophe. Well done and keep up the good work.
Hi
Great start to your story, not all of the story makes sense so look at it again
From somran
Hi Jayana
Your story had dragged me in and scared me almost creped me out
Great work Jay Jay 😀
Great stuff Jayanna, what a fabulous twist to your response to this week’s prompt and I love how you used a question to leave me wondering what happens next; this is the sign of a talented writer!
Remember to check your verbs are all in the correct tense.
Miss A
Fantastic writing Jayanna. I was hooked right from the start. I love your question at the end. It really makes you think.:D
From Surabhi
Well done Jayanna. I really liked reading your response to this week’s prompt. It was an imaginative piece and you used the prompt in a creative way. I liked some of the descriptive words that you used and I think you hooked the reader. I would like to know how the story ends and why there are two babies in the photo. One small thing that I picked up on was that ‘father’s office’ would need an apostrophe. Well done and keep up the good work.
Mr Fitzpatrick,
Tasmania, Australia
100WC team