Hi Alex,
Thank you for entering this week’s 100 Word Challenge.
I enjoyed reading your story. I felt so sorry for Jack. How was he to know the couch was cursed? I think I would have done the same thing if I saw a couch “inviting me” to sit down.
Well done and keep up the good work!
I look forward to reading more adventures from you.
Alex, the use of punctuation is excellent, especially, the capital letters in the last sentence to emphasize. When I read the word scorching in the first sentence I could almost feel the heat of that great big fire. I loved the way you created suspense in the story and I almost wished the boy not to go near the bench as I was reading it.
Great stuff Alex, I love the way you used the narrator’s voice to draw me into your story. Check your punctuation before you publish next time.
Miss A
Hi Alex,
Thank you for entering this week’s 100 Word Challenge.
I enjoyed reading your story. I felt so sorry for Jack. How was he to know the couch was cursed? I think I would have done the same thing if I saw a couch “inviting me” to sit down.
Well done and keep up the good work!
I look forward to reading more adventures from you.
Mrs Boyce @ Team 100 WC
Cork, Ireland
Come and visit our Class Blog at http://kidblog.org/MrsBoycesClass-4/
Alex, the use of punctuation is excellent, especially, the capital letters in the last sentence to emphasize. When I read the word scorching in the first sentence I could almost feel the heat of that great big fire. I loved the way you created suspense in the story and I almost wished the boy not to go near the bench as I was reading it.