the plane Abhi

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2 Responses to the plane Abhi

  1. Miss Potts (Team 100) says:

    A great response to this week’s challenge. You have used some interesting words which engage the reader. Some of your short sentences work well as they demonstrate the character’s thoughts, however, you could improve by mixing these short sentences with more complex ones. Keep up the great work!

  2. singm says:

    Brilliant description Abhinav. It really took me in but don’t overdo the short sentances.

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