Oh dear! Well I’m glad that nobody was hurt in your story! Well done for entering this week’s 100WC, Ithmam. You have done a fine job. I like how you described how it felt to sit on the plane seats. Check your third to last paragraph and make the changes. My favourite word that you have used is ‘gladly’ – I especially like how you started the sentence with it to make your writing more exciting. Keep it up!
Oh dear! Well I’m glad that nobody was hurt in your story! Well done for entering this week’s 100WC, Ithmam. You have done a fine job. I like how you described how it felt to sit on the plane seats. Check your third to last paragraph and make the changes. My favourite word that you have used is ‘gladly’ – I especially like how you started the sentence with it to make your writing more exciting. Keep it up!
A very dramatic story Ithmam and that’s what I liked about it. It changed from calm to hazardous. An improvement from me would add more clauses.