Oh my goodness, Harry! This is an exciting story. I really like the idea of thousands of people being seen as elegant mermaids as this gives a sense of peace and serenity! Well done for including lots of similes and metaphors to keep the reader interested!
Try to read your work aloud to yourself before you submit, as this will make it a lot easier for you to pick out any spelling and punctuation mistakes.
I really look forward to reading your next piece of writing!
Mr H. (Team 100WC)
check your work and put in capital letters. make sure it make sense.
by janna
good work Harri!=)
Oh my goodness, Harry! This is an exciting story. I really like the idea of thousands of people being seen as elegant mermaids as this gives a sense of peace and serenity! Well done for including lots of similes and metaphors to keep the reader interested!
Try to read your work aloud to yourself before you submit, as this will make it a lot easier for you to pick out any spelling and punctuation mistakes.
I really look forward to reading your next piece of writing!
Mr H. (Team 100WC)