I agree with Miss A. I always read through my writing before pressing ‘publish’ as you can often see where you might like to change things. There were some great descriptions here and I loved the idea that the water park could actually be a portal to a strange world. I’m not quite sure where the shark came from though? Well done for taking part this week and I hope to read more of your writing soon.
Lots of great vivid description Arif but you need to make sure all your events link in your story. Reading things back will help you with that.
Miss A
I agree with Miss A. I always read through my writing before pressing ‘publish’ as you can often see where you might like to change things. There were some great descriptions here and I loved the idea that the water park could actually be a portal to a strange world. I’m not quite sure where the shark came from though? Well done for taking part this week and I hope to read more of your writing soon.