A nice story with some tension on the robbers. I wouldn’t like it if I were robbed. Try to vary your sentence structure and try to use some synonyms. Zaeem:) :p
Serena, using only 100 words to tell a story can be hard. You did a great job getting right into the action! It would help readers understand what is happening if you say which character is performing the action, rather than a pronoun (he, they). Keep up the good work!
A nice story with some tension on the robbers. I wouldn’t like it if I were robbed. Try to vary your sentence structure and try to use some synonyms. Zaeem:) :p
A nice story with some tension on the robbers. I wouldn’t like it if I were robbed. Try to use some synonyms. Zaeem:) :p
Very nice story, make sure you don’t include bank too much.
:)From Sachien5B:)
Serena, using only 100 words to tell a story can be hard. You did a great job getting right into the action! It would help readers understand what is happening if you say which character is performing the action, rather than a pronoun (he, they). Keep up the good work!