A super entry in this week’s 100 WC Arafah!
You have used the prompt well and have creative ideas. I like that you have written a poem and used a range of poetic techniques to really capture the mood of remembrance.
Keep up the hard work.
Mrs N Goulbourne, Team 100, Liverpool, UK
Well done Arafah – your use of repetition was obviously meant to invoke a reaction of thought as well as to get your point across to the reader. You have used the prompt to create a good poem. A small amount of editing on the last line to bring it to the standard of the rest of the poem is needed. Keep up the good work and enjoy your writing 🙂
Arafah you have done a very good job considering your age.
The poem reminds me of all the soldiers fought for us and makes us sentimental as well.
Very true the repetion brings up more emotions.
Great stuff Arafah, you made good use of repetition in your poem to emphasise your message to your reader. Well done
You have written a very emotional piece of writing! The repetition brings on the emotion. You do need to check the last line. Keep on writing!
A super entry in this week’s 100 WC Arafah!
You have used the prompt well and have creative ideas. I like that you have written a poem and used a range of poetic techniques to really capture the mood of remembrance.
Keep up the hard work.
Mrs N Goulbourne, Team 100, Liverpool, UK
Well done Arafah – your use of repetition was obviously meant to invoke a reaction of thought as well as to get your point across to the reader. You have used the prompt to create a good poem. A small amount of editing on the last line to bring it to the standard of the rest of the poem is needed. Keep up the good work and enjoy your writing 🙂
good work Arafah everything rhymed l liked the beginning of your poem very much keep up the good work miss Anand will be happy.
excelent poem arafah, reminds us all those people who sacrifised themselve so that we can have a good life. keep up the good work.
Arafah you have done a very good job considering your age.
The poem reminds me of all the soldiers fought for us and makes us sentimental as well.
Very true the repetion brings up more emotions.
Keep it up.