You have a clear authorial voice that draws your reader in and gets your message across in a clever way.
Next time take time to check your tenses are accurate.
I enjoyed the story it was an unusual way to get your road safety message across.
Perhaps next time include more information in your narrative in order not to confuse the reader. Though you still write a powerful story. Well Done.
I liked it. it was fun to read
It hooked me in.
Hi Ryan,
You have a clear authorial voice that draws your reader in and gets your message across in a clever way.
Next time take time to check your tenses are accurate.
Keep up the great writing.
Mrs Moore
I enjoyed the story it was an unusual way to get your road safety message across.
Perhaps next time include more information in your narrative in order not to confuse the reader. Though you still write a powerful story. Well Done.
Dougie from Manchester.
very good story