Brilliant Zainab! I loved how you used dialogue to draw me into your action packed story ending; I especially loved the line ” I have nature and imagination” . Next time remember to start a new line when someone new starts to speak so as not to confuse your reader. Keep up the great work
Good story. I would make sure that you include punctuation where it needs to be and don’t forget the words like “the” in your story. I would also make sure that when you are quoting someone talking, the quotation marks go directly around their speech, without a space between the words and “. Keep up the hard work.
Brilliant Zainab! I loved how you used dialogue to draw me into your action packed story ending; I especially loved the line ” I have nature and imagination” . Next time remember to start a new line when someone new starts to speak so as not to confuse your reader. Keep up the great work
Zainab,
Good story. I would make sure that you include punctuation where it needs to be and don’t forget the words like “the” in your story. I would also make sure that when you are quoting someone talking, the quotation marks go directly around their speech, without a space between the words and “. Keep up the hard work.
Ms. Ferri
100WC Team