Good Punctuation, and I like how you used ellipsis when you described the UFO, but you can use more adjectives and descriptive words.
I enjoyed reading your story. Well done.
It was a pity this UFO ruined what seemed to be an idyllic day. I’m not sure I would have been able to say nothing and go to bed after such an adventure.
Good work this week.
Mrs Boyce (Team 100WC)
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