Wow, what a fabulous piece of spooky descriptive writing! I really love the way you used your senses to draw me in. I want to know what happens next; this is the sign of a talented writer.
Next time try to vary your sentence starters.
Well done.
Mrs Moore
What happened? Great use of suspense.
Wow, what a fabulous piece of spooky descriptive writing! I really love the way you used your senses to draw me in. I want to know what happens next; this is the sign of a talented writer.
Next time try to vary your sentence starters.
Well done.
Mrs Moore