Your story shares the sort of strange choices we can make when scared by something dangerous. Lewis, rather than staying in the relative safety of the home, decides to pack his bags and run. This choice places him in danger when, instead of safety, he finds the dragon. Leaving us with a question, we have to use our imagination to complete the story. Will Lewis meet his end? Will Lewis escape? Will this be a similar story to “Pete’s Dragon” where dragon and boy become friends? I like the possibilities. Well done.
I can see the care you have taken with spelling and punctuation. Again, well done.
My suggestion might be to consider your last sentence. It’s worded as a statement rather than a question so it could be… You guess what happens next.
Or Can you guess what happens next?
I hope can continue entering the 100WC. We may yet have a chance to find Lewis’s fate.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hello Alex,
Your story shares the sort of strange choices we can make when scared by something dangerous. Lewis, rather than staying in the relative safety of the home, decides to pack his bags and run. This choice places him in danger when, instead of safety, he finds the dragon. Leaving us with a question, we have to use our imagination to complete the story. Will Lewis meet his end? Will Lewis escape? Will this be a similar story to “Pete’s Dragon” where dragon and boy become friends? I like the possibilities. Well done.
I can see the care you have taken with spelling and punctuation. Again, well done.
My suggestion might be to consider your last sentence. It’s worded as a statement rather than a question so it could be…
You guess what happens next.
Or
Can you guess what happens next?
I hope can continue entering the 100WC. We may yet have a chance to find Lewis’s fate.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia