Hi Oliver,
I can see that you’ve been inspired by current events in you writing. You really have a strong authorial voice and I can almost hear you’re excitement at there being no school and then how quickly everything became strange. Next time make sure you check your punctuation , as you’ve missed some out.
I really enjoyed reading this and what to know what happens next; this is something talented writers do!
Well done.
Mrs M
This was a great read! You really captured my imagination and created a story I wanted to follow. It would have easier to follow with some punctuation.
Can’t wait to see what you write next.
Mr Geary Team 100
Hi Oliver,
I can see that you’ve been inspired by current events in you writing. You really have a strong authorial voice and I can almost hear you’re excitement at there being no school and then how quickly everything became strange. Next time make sure you check your punctuation , as you’ve missed some out.
I really enjoyed reading this and what to know what happens next; this is something talented writers do!
Well done.
Mrs M
Hi Oliver,
This was a great read! You really captured my imagination and created a story I wanted to follow. It would have easier to follow with some punctuation.
Can’t wait to see what you write next.
Mr Geary Team 100