Wow Shayaan! I really want to know what what’s happened to your family and what you’re going to do now. You’ve used the word ‘so’ a lot, could you think of another way of saying that?
Keep up the great work
This was another great response to the prompt this week; you made good use of questions to leave me thinking at the end which is a great authorial device. I do think you should have checked this before you published as I can see some error.
Wow Shayaan! I really want to know what what’s happened to your family and what you’re going to do now. You’ve used the word ‘so’ a lot, could you think of another way of saying that?
Keep up the great work
Hi Shayaan,
This was another great response to the prompt this week; you made good use of questions to leave me thinking at the end which is a great authorial device. I do think you should have checked this before you published as I can see some error.
Mrs Moore