Paradise by Pasupathi Sivaruban

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3 Responses to Paradise by Pasupathi Sivaruban

  1. nanand says:

    Hi Pasupathi,

    I can now see how your story links to the prompt. This was an original and very intriguing way to respond to the prompt; I love the way you created an idyllic setting and then suddenly changed to atmosphere at the end, leaving me wanting to know what happens next.
    Make sure your verbs are in the correct tense before you publish.
    Mrs M

  2. Mr T Geary Team 100 says:

    Hey Pasupathi,
    This was a beautiful piece of writing, you used some wonderful vocabulary to create an atmosphere.
    Thanks for sharing.

    Mr Geary Team 100

  3. Máire O'Keeffe says:

    Hi Pasupathi
    What an incredible piece of writing! You created a beautiful picture with your words and I really like how you used words like “excitedly” to describe the children and “towering’ to describe the palm trees. But I also love a good mystery and you definitely left me wondering at the end of your piece when you wrote “a platoon of mysteriousness still lurks”. I’d love to know what happens next??? Well done on this excellent 100 word challenge.
    Máire O’Keeffe Team 100wc
    Galway Ireland

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