Hi Mehwish,
This was a great piece of writing , you made great use of story language and punctuated your writing really well. Next time think about starting a new paragraph when there is a change of time. Can you see where you need to do that here?
Well done! Mrs Moore.
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Hi Mehwish,
This was a great piece of writing , you made great use of story language and punctuated your writing really well. Next time think about starting a new paragraph when there is a change of time. Can you see where you need to do that here?
Well done!
Mrs Moore.