I can see that you’ve responded to your feedback and improved your punctuation, this makes your exciting story a much clearer read. Keep that focus all the way to the end.
Well you certainly had me gripped from the start, he certainly sounds like he was in quite a predicament. I want to know what happened before all of this so I can really understand what’s happened.
Well done. Keep on writing.
Mrs Hutchinson
Team 100 New Zealand
Hi Shayaan,
I can see that you’ve responded to your feedback and improved your punctuation, this makes your exciting story a much clearer read. Keep that focus all the way to the end.
Mrs Moore
Hello Shayaan,
Well you certainly had me gripped from the start, he certainly sounds like he was in quite a predicament. I want to know what happened before all of this so I can really understand what’s happened.
Well done. Keep on writing.
Mrs Hutchinson
Team 100 New Zealand