I hope you and your family are keeping safe and well during this lockdown.
Thank you for sharing your writing this week. I really loved the way you opened your writing, creating a mystery that immediately pulled me and left me wanting to know more. You also included some great detail in describing your fearsome snake. Remember to use the past perfect tense when talking about the past of the past.
I like the sense of tension you create at the start of your story, Rayyan, Particularly the sentence ‘No one knows why’. It makes we want to find out more. You describe the snake so well. I especially like the way you call him a ‘sneaky snake’. It makes him seem even scarier!
Hi Rayyan,
I hope you and your family are keeping safe and well during this lockdown.
Thank you for sharing your writing this week. I really loved the way you opened your writing, creating a mystery that immediately pulled me and left me wanting to know more. You also included some great detail in describing your fearsome snake. Remember to use the past perfect tense when talking about the past of the past.
Keep up the great writing and stay safe.
Mrs Moore
I like the sense of tension you create at the start of your story, Rayyan, Particularly the sentence ‘No one knows why’. It makes we want to find out more. You describe the snake so well. I especially like the way you call him a ‘sneaky snake’. It makes him seem even scarier!