Hi Oliver,
Wow! This certainly sounds like quite a perilous situation; I do hope you come out of it in one piece! Your fantastic use of precise description really helped to create a picture in my mind and a creepy atmosphere; this is something greate writer’s do. My only advice would be to proof read before you publish as I can see a few boo boos.
Well done.
Mrs M
Oliver, excellent writing, I love how you use adjectives to draw your reader’s attention. Would be even better if you remembered to use capitals at the beginning of sentences… Still, really good, I love your writing!
Hi Oliver,
Wow! This certainly sounds like quite a perilous situation; I do hope you come out of it in one piece! Your fantastic use of precise description really helped to create a picture in my mind and a creepy atmosphere; this is something greate writer’s do. My only advice would be to proof read before you publish as I can see a few boo boos.
Well done.
Mrs M
Oliver, excellent writing, I love how you use adjectives to draw your reader’s attention. Would be even better if you remembered to use capitals at the beginning of sentences… Still, really good, I love your writing!