Phew! What a relief Amina! That must have been very scary for Bob and Benny! Well done I love all your descriptive language and explanation of why they did things, I think I might investigate to see if there was treasure too. Next time try using connectives to link ideas.
Amazing story Amina I love the bit when you said the wind was howling in there ears. Next time try to not use too much of they.
from your best friend Arafah
Phew! What a relief Amina! That must have been very scary for Bob and Benny! Well done I love all your descriptive language and explanation of why they did things, I think I might investigate to see if there was treasure too. Next time try using connectives to link ideas.
thank you miss anand and I will try to use connectives
Amazing story Amina I love the bit when you said the wind was howling in there ears. Next time try to not use too much of they.
from your best friend Arafah
thanks and i will