The Last day by Robert Maries

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3 Responses to The Last day by Robert Maries

  1. nanand says:

    Hi Robert,

    Hope you’re doing ok during these strange times.

    I really loved reading this and what an important message! I loved your description of how it all died out.
    You might want to check your tenses.
    Well done.
    Mrs M

  2. Cath (Team100, Melbourne, Australia) says:

    Hello Robert, I think repeating the word “dark”, added to the mystery and mood of the story. Sometimes this would not work but because of the content of you story it is appropriate. It was quite a complex idea to have humans reliant on the tree for their lives. Your last sentence works really well and creates an image of absolute starkness and perhaps acts as a warning to humans. Well done.

  3. Mrs P (Team 100WC) says:

    Hi Robert
    I enjoyed the way you used the prompt. You didn’t describe the picture, rather just used it as a basis for the writing. Remember to re read your writing to check for punctuation – full stops and capital letters. It makes it easier for the reader. Great work this week.
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

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