Mrs Moore, this is my edited piece.
You might want to have a quick check before I enter you.
Hello Singh, I see that you have edited your piece of writing. This is a great skill to develop. I liked how descriptive your story was, as it provided me with a visual image. You have used some really good adjectives: gigantic, glistening, luminous and dangerous. Your last two sentences made me wonder what was going to happen next. Well done.
I’m sorry, Spandana, I made a mistake with your name.
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