Hello Singh, I see that you have edited your piece of writing. This is a great skill to develop. I liked how descriptive your story was, as it provided me with a visual image. You have used some really good adjectives: gigantic, glistening, luminous and dangerous. Your last two sentences made me wonder what was going to happen next. Well done.
Mrs Moore, this is my edited piece.
Hi Spandana,
You might want to have a quick check before I enter you.
Mrs M
Hello Singh, I see that you have edited your piece of writing. This is a great skill to develop. I liked how descriptive your story was, as it provided me with a visual image. You have used some really good adjectives: gigantic, glistening, luminous and dangerous. Your last two sentences made me wonder what was going to happen next. Well done.
I’m sorry, Spandana, I made a mistake with your name.