I really enjoyed reading your fabulously descriptive response to the prompt this week; you created an engaging atmosphere for your reader. I would look at the word order at the start of your second sentence. But well done; I want to know what happens next!
Mrs M
Hello Yukta, for some reason I can’t see the first couple of lines of your story (the picture is blocking it). The part of the story that I can see though, provides lots of details. You have been quite skilful in your choice of words, similes and metaphor. I really liked, “spring’s beating heart”. Well done.
Hi Yukta,
Hope you’re doing ok during these strange times.
I really enjoyed reading your fabulously descriptive response to the prompt this week; you created an engaging atmosphere for your reader. I would look at the word order at the start of your second sentence. But well done; I want to know what happens next!
Mrs M
Hello Yukta, for some reason I can’t see the first couple of lines of your story (the picture is blocking it). The part of the story that I can see though, provides lots of details. You have been quite skilful in your choice of words, similes and metaphor. I really liked, “spring’s beating heart”. Well done.