Wow Safwan, what a tragic tale. I really like how you used precise detail to make your story seem more real. Remember to make every word count and think about how you use your 100 words.
Hi Safwan, what an imaginative story. My only input would be to keep an eye on sentence structure, spelling and punctuation. There seems to be a fair amount of repetition. I am really pleased your wrote and submitted your story, keep going 🙂
Hi, Well done for entering. I like the way you ended the story with a question – it really makes the reader stop and think.
Check before you upload because some of your sentences have been posted in the middle several times.
Wow Safwan, what a tragic tale. I really like how you used precise detail to make your story seem more real. Remember to make every word count and think about how you use your 100 words.
Hi Safwan, what an imaginative story. My only input would be to keep an eye on sentence structure, spelling and punctuation. There seems to be a fair amount of repetition. I am really pleased your wrote and submitted your story, keep going 🙂
Hi, Well done for entering. I like the way you ended the story with a question – it really makes the reader stop and think.
Check before you upload because some of your sentences have been posted in the middle several times.