Hi Furqan,
You’ve made some great use descriptive language to paint a picture in my mind. I got a little confused as you seemed to jump from first person, I, to third person, he, so make sure you always read your work back.
Keep on writing. Mrs M
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Hi Furqan,
You’ve made some great use descriptive language to paint a picture in my mind. I got a little confused as you seemed to jump from first person, I, to third person, he, so make sure you always read your work back.
Keep on writing.
Mrs M