This was a great read! I can see you really took on board your last feedback and have thought about punctuation and paragraphing. I really loved the way you built up the tension using the narrator’s voice. You left me want to know more; this is what talented writers do.
Mrs M
Hi Oliver,
This was a great read! I can see you really took on board your last feedback and have thought about punctuation and paragraphing. I really loved the way you built up the tension using the narrator’s voice. You left me want to know more; this is what talented writers do.
Mrs M