Hi Hidit,
Well done for editing your work, I can see some real improvements. You have again made great use of vocabulary to create some engaging imagery for your reader; I especially liked your use of the word ‘chortled’.
Keep up the great work.
Mrs M
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Hi Hidit,
Well done for editing your work, I can see some real improvements. You have again made great use of vocabulary to create some engaging imagery for your reader; I especially liked your use of the word ‘chortled’.
Keep up the great work.
Mrs M