This is a great tale and I can see you’ve really worked hard at your tenses but you need to make reference to the picture prompt; how could you incorporate what is happening between the man, the bear and the car in your story?
Mrs M
Greenland would be a very exciting adventure… did you see a polar bear? I am curious about the times you mentioned, are they important to your vacation and your experiences there? Hearing ‘why’ you were excited about the flight and your time in Greenland would help your readers to imagine your story, as you probably saw some amazing things.
Hi Andrei,
This is a great tale and I can see you’ve really worked hard at your tenses but you need to make reference to the picture prompt; how could you incorporate what is happening between the man, the bear and the car in your story?
Mrs M
Greenland would be a very exciting adventure… did you see a polar bear? I am curious about the times you mentioned, are they important to your vacation and your experiences there? Hearing ‘why’ you were excited about the flight and your time in Greenland would help your readers to imagine your story, as you probably saw some amazing things.