Well tried – you have used some great starters, like “Within an instant”, and your short sentences add tension, and make the feeling of waiting for a delivery come alive! You have made it tricky for us to read with your colours – next time, try to think about your readers! Well done Esha!
I would love to be able to comment on your 100wc,but the colours and font you have used makes it impossible for me to read it.
Well tried – you have used some great starters, like “Within an instant”, and your short sentences add tension, and make the feeling of waiting for a delivery come alive! You have made it tricky for us to read with your colours – next time, try to think about your readers! Well done Esha!
wow esha I love your work and all of your descriptive language!!
remember to use some commas so that you don’t make it sound like you are doing the things fast!!!
Beautiful work, however you could use some semi colons.
From Sara