safwan

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6 Responses to safwan

  1. islaa says:

    Hi
    I liked when you decried the red figure you saw.

  2. gandz says:

    good work Safwan, slowly and sometimes quickly your writing improves and thats great. I loved your description and keep up the good work.:p

  3. nanand says:

    This is great Safwan, I love how you used descriptive language to paint a picture in my mind and create a mood for your story and then use questions to draw me into your story further, remember to punctuate them.
    Miss A

  4. mulkr says:

    wow safwan you made me think that you would disappear but it was a surprise party

  5. rahma says:

    I like your description but you need to check your grammer

  6. hussa says:

    I liked that you used similes and adjectives your story was amazing but next time use some metaphors

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