A beautiful piece of work, Annais, the way they were nervous in their odd PJ’s, and the amazingly built suspense, from the sentence: Both of them were sweating with hope and they slowly teared off their red wrapping paper. Very good, but just remember to check if your past tense words are correct. Hint Hint: teared = tore. An astounding piece of work, deep and clear, tense, and happy, just amazing Annais. That’s all I can say about your work. all you need to do is check for little mistakes, and other than that, FAB WORK! keep it up Annais, from Imani ♥
I like how explained the present like which one they wanted well done
A beautiful piece of work, Annais, the way they were nervous in their odd PJ’s, and the amazingly built suspense, from the sentence: Both of them were sweating with hope and they slowly teared off their red wrapping paper. Very good, but just remember to check if your past tense words are correct. Hint Hint: teared = tore. An astounding piece of work, deep and clear, tense, and happy, just amazing Annais. That’s all I can say about your work. all you need to do is check for little mistakes, and other than that, FAB WORK! keep it up Annais, from Imani ♥
I love your story, but I just noticed that you wrote a Ipad instead of an ipad. Anyway fab work!
From Sara