I like how you used interesting emotions to describe the boy, but I have seen you have made some grammar mistakes. For example; when you wrote “As he started they” you didn’t do a capital letter for A as you have to because you had finished the previous sentence so you have to do a capital letter. I have also noticed on the second paragraph, you repeated the same mistake and didn’t do a capital “S.” Also in the second paragraph I have seen you wrote He came rushing to see what’s happening. Although you are supposed to write what was happening. Also in the second paragraph you wrote the boy was punished for a year and had to be in his bedroom. Other then that an amazing job! 🙂
From Sara
Hello Zaynab
Happy New Year to you!
I’m so glad the boy in your story was punished for not following the Firework Code! You wrote an interesting story about a mischievous boy who wanted some fun! Make sure you remember all the capital letters for the start of sentences!
I like how you used interesting emotions to describe the boy, but I have seen you have made some grammar mistakes. For example; when you wrote “As he started they” you didn’t do a capital letter for A as you have to because you had finished the previous sentence so you have to do a capital letter. I have also noticed on the second paragraph, you repeated the same mistake and didn’t do a capital “S.” Also in the second paragraph I have seen you wrote He came rushing to see what’s happening. Although you are supposed to write what was happening. Also in the second paragraph you wrote the boy was punished for a year and had to be in his bedroom. Other then that an amazing job! 🙂
From Sara
Hello Zaynab
Happy New Year to you!
I’m so glad the boy in your story was punished for not following the Firework Code! You wrote an interesting story about a mischievous boy who wanted some fun! Make sure you remember all the capital letters for the start of sentences!