Hi Sadia and Happy New Year to you!
Even though this is the first 100WC this year, almost 1000 children posted entries this week!
What I like about your writing…
* You have used your imagination! I didn’t expect to see a poem.
* You have brought your writing to life with the use of thoughts and feelings, I can feel the excitement.
What I’d love to see next time…
# Even though it is a poem, you still need to add punctuation to highlight to your readers where to pause.
Well done and keep writing. 🙂
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team)
Wirral
UK
Hi Sadia,
What an exciting evening for you and I do like the poetic form you have chosen to share your experience. I love the descriptive language of your first line, but am a little confused about the your fire drinking hot chocolate! Read the first verse aloud and you will see what I mean.
Have a wonderfully successful 2015,
Jackie
Hi Sadia and Happy New Year to you!
Even though this is the first 100WC this year, almost 1000 children posted entries this week!
What I like about your writing…
* You have used your imagination! I didn’t expect to see a poem.
* You have brought your writing to life with the use of thoughts and feelings, I can feel the excitement.
What I’d love to see next time…
# Even though it is a poem, you still need to add punctuation to highlight to your readers where to pause.
Well done and keep writing. 🙂
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team)
Wirral
UK
Hi Sadia,
What an exciting evening for you and I do like the poetic form you have chosen to share your experience. I love the descriptive language of your first line, but am a little confused about the your fire drinking hot chocolate! Read the first verse aloud and you will see what I mean.
Have a wonderfully successful 2015,
Jackie