Hi Sadia and Happy New Year to you!
Even though this is the first 100WC this year, almost 1000 children posted entries this week!
What I like about your writing…
* You have used your imagination! I didn’t expect to see a poem.
* You have brought your writing to life with the use of thoughts and feelings, I can feel the excitement.
What I’d love to see next time…
# Even though it is a poem, you still need to add punctuation to highlight to your readers where to pause.
Well done and keep writing.
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team)
Wirral
UK
Hi Sadia,
What an exciting evening for you and I do like the poetic form you have chosen to share your experience. I love the descriptive language of your first line, but am a little confused about the your fire drinking hot chocolate! Read the first verse aloud and you will see what I mean.
Have a wonderfully successful 2015,
Jackie
Hi Sadia and Happy New Year to you!
Even though this is the first 100WC this year, almost 1000 children posted entries this week!
What I like about your writing…
* You have used your imagination! I didn’t expect to see a poem.
* You have brought your writing to life with the use of thoughts and feelings, I can feel the excitement.
What I’d love to see next time…
# Even though it is a poem, you still need to add punctuation to highlight to your readers where to pause.
Well done and keep writing.
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team)
Wirral
UK
Hi Sadia,
What an exciting evening for you and I do like the poetic form you have chosen to share your experience. I love the descriptive language of your first line, but am a little confused about the your fire drinking hot chocolate! Read the first verse aloud and you will see what I mean.
Have a wonderfully successful 2015,
Jackie