This is a really interesting way to include this week’s prompt, Hamzah; I haven’t read any other diary entries for this week’s 100WC – well done.
I like the fact that you have used a relative clause accurately – this is not always easy to do. I also like the way you show a sense of humour in your writing when you are talking directly to the reader.
Next time, try to use a range of different sentence openers: for example, start a sentence with a verb or an adverb.
This is a really interesting way to include this week’s prompt, Hamzah; I haven’t read any other diary entries for this week’s 100WC – well done.
I like the fact that you have used a relative clause accurately – this is not always easy to do. I also like the way you show a sense of humour in your writing when you are talking directly to the reader.
Next time, try to use a range of different sentence openers: for example, start a sentence with a verb or an adverb.
Keep up the good work!