Well done Imaan, you really used repetition well to make me wonder what happened to the boys. Remember to watch your spelling of homophones; their/there or no/know.
Miss A
An amazing tale I like how you have used particular words to create tension and atmosphere. I have noticed in one sentence you have put a capital ‘D’. For this sentence you do not need a capital d. Well done!
From Sara 🙂
Great work Imaan! You had some really fantastic descriptive language which hooked me up as your story was absolutely amazing to read. You must remember that !!! or ??? is not punctuation but other than that I enjoyed reading your story.
From: Noha 5A
Hi I like what pupils at Gearies are doing with their blogging. Your work is interesting to read, but maybe you could use a few less !!!
London class in Yr 3 have just published some writing about their climbing wall experiences- maybe you could take a look and see what you think? Mrs Coop. Mead School, Harold Hill
Well done Imaan, you really used repetition well to make me wonder what happened to the boys. Remember to watch your spelling of homophones; their/there or no/know.
Miss A
;)thank you Miss.A!!!
;)thank you Miss.A!!
This is a great piece of writing just remember you don’t always need font.
This is Anjali from 5A ♥
thank you very much!!!
Hi Imaan!
I really like your story and that its full of adventure next time just add more adjectives
P.S i would pick you as a winner
By Sadia 5A :]
An amazing tale I like how you have used particular words to create tension and atmosphere. I have noticed in one sentence you have put a capital ‘D’. For this sentence you do not need a capital d. Well done!
From Sara 🙂
I like how you used gloomy at the start, but it is 107 words.
Great work Imaan! You had some really fantastic descriptive language which hooked me up as your story was absolutely amazing to read. You must remember that !!! or ??? is not punctuation but other than that I enjoyed reading your story.
From: Noha 5A
Imaan great work, just check some missing punctuation such as won’t.:P Zaeem
Good story Imaan, I like how you described the night with gloomy because its makes the picture in my head.
Karolinaaa :3
Hi, Imaan. Adeeba here. I really liked your repetition but check your spelling. Signing out.
Hi I like what pupils at Gearies are doing with their blogging. Your work is interesting to read, but maybe you could use a few less !!!
London class in Yr 3 have just published some writing about their climbing wall experiences- maybe you could take a look and see what you think? Mrs Coop. Mead School, Harold Hill
Hi Imaan I like your story a lot because its very descriptive and has good vocabulary and I also like the way you described the setting