Fantastic 100 words, Sara. Your descriptive writing is good, you have a wide vocabulary. I’m not sure the moon and stars would be bright on a wet night when the clouds are weeping, though.
Brilliant story Sara. You really, vividly described the setting and created allot of tension in it. You have put allot of figurative language. You did an amazing job! Keep it up.
Splat, splat. All I could hear was the horror in this piece, Sara. My heart was pounding. I was so taken in by this writing that by the time I finished, I was Petrified. This makes a great effect on people. Great work 🙂
Fantastic 100 words, Sara. Your descriptive writing is good, you have a wide vocabulary. I’m not sure the moon and stars would be bright on a wet night when the clouds are weeping, though.
Thank you for commenting on my work! 🙂
From Sara
Excellent story Sara, good descriptive language and good use of punctuations.
Well done.
Mrs Mitchell 100wc team
Thanks for commenting on my work! I really appreciate it. 🙂
From Sara
You love using the words sapphire and glistening , your descriptive language puts me on the edge of my seat. Well done
Thanks and yeah. ♥
Brilliant story Sara. You really, vividly described the setting and created allot of tension in it. You have put allot of figurative language. You did an amazing job! Keep it up.
Ratheena 🙂
your story is very good and it is the best i have ever read surely you will win the competition
Thanks 😀
Splat, splat. All I could hear was the horror in this piece, Sara. My heart was pounding. I was so taken in by this writing that by the time I finished, I was Petrified. This makes a great effect on people. Great work 🙂
Thanks ♥