I really like this tale you have added a lot of descriptive words to create atmosphere and tension for the reader. I have noticed that in the second sentence for ‘Two Cars’ you did an extra space between them. Other then that you have done an amazing job! From Sara 🙂
I felt as though fingers made of ice were running up my spine while reading this, Ratheena. But how are the ghosts petrified? I don’t understand. But maybe they were petrifying? Either way, great attempt! Keep up the fab work! Keep on writing! -Imani
You had a lot of description in this piece of writing . You had a tension in your writing I wonder what would of happended to Amy and Lucy.
Thank You Anjali!
I really like this tale you have added a lot of descriptive words to create atmosphere and tension for the reader. I have noticed that in the second sentence for ‘Two Cars’ you did an extra space between them. Other then that you have done an amazing job! From Sara 🙂
Thank You Sara!
I felt as though fingers made of ice were running up my spine while reading this, Ratheena. But how are the ghosts petrified? I don’t understand. But maybe they were petrifying? Either way, great attempt! Keep up the fab work! Keep on writing! -Imani
It was a mistake. I was supposed to say” The petrified children”
Ratheena, you have added a lot of atmoshpere to create tension and you have also added a lot of punctuation
Thank You Alima!