Great stuff Chetan, I love all your descriptive language and use of similes to paint a picture in my mind. Remember to check your tenses all match.
Miss A
London
You have created an amazing description of “Creepy Street”. Your sensory language engaged all of my senses! I could see and feel the light as “bright as the burning, hot sun”. The images of a “harsh rain”, the “slippery” street and the cold, cold night gave me goosebumps. I loved how you contrasted that setting with the scene of the “little children sleeping tight in their cozy beds”. I was in such suspense about your original last line.
Great stuff Chetan, I love all your descriptive language and use of similes to paint a picture in my mind. Remember to check your tenses all match.
Miss A
London
Hello Chetan,
You have created an amazing description of “Creepy Street”. Your sensory language engaged all of my senses! I could see and feel the light as “bright as the burning, hot sun”. The images of a “harsh rain”, the “slippery” street and the cold, cold night gave me goosebumps. I loved how you contrasted that setting with the scene of the “little children sleeping tight in their cozy beds”. I was in such suspense about your original last line.
Irene