A very good piece of writing Anjali, I like how you have added descriptive words to create attention for the reader also atmosphere. I have noticed that you have added a space and then do the punctuation mark. You don’t actually have to do that you just do a space after you have finished the sentence and carry on the next. Other then that I think you have done a marvellous piece of work! Well done! 🙂
From Sara
An amazing story, Anjali. I love it when you described the setting, it really gave me a vivid image in my mind! You created allot of tension and atmosphere. Well done!
Excellent use of description Anjali. I like your descriptive setting. You have used an good choice of words to describe the atmosphere you have placed in the story.
MYSTERY PERSON IN YEAR 5
A very good piece of writing Anjali, I like how you have added descriptive words to create attention for the reader also atmosphere. I have noticed that you have added a space and then do the punctuation mark. You don’t actually have to do that you just do a space after you have finished the sentence and carry on the next. Other then that I think you have done a marvellous piece of work! Well done! 🙂
From Sara
An amazing story, Anjali. I love it when you described the setting, it really gave me a vivid image in my mind! You created allot of tension and atmosphere. Well done!
Ratheena
fabulous work Irina! I liked how you used short sentences but then using loads of discripton it really improves your piece of writing!
Anjali, you have added a lot of punctuation to your writing to make is better and also you have added a lot of description!
Excellent use of description Anjali. I like your descriptive setting. You have used an good choice of words to describe the atmosphere you have placed in the story.
MYSTERY PERSON IN YEAR 5
A great, spooky effect on the reader, Anjali. A great, dark background gives a great, dark story. I ♥ it, keep it up!