Your entry is the only one I have visited to have used poetic form. Well done.
What a tragic tale you have shared. A rainy night on a dark road is shattered by the crash of a low flying plane. Caught under the crashing plane, a small girl lies seriously injured, perhaps dead. The tale becomes even more tragic when you realise the small girl is your niece. Again, well done.
One advantage in using a poetic form of writing is you are able to be a little freer in your use of words. The verses need not rhyme but can carry great images for the reader although I can see you have attempted to use rhyme in places.
I hope you can continue entering the 100WC. It gives you the chance to share your ideas with the world.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
An amazing poem Sophia! I like how you used rhythm and atmospheric words to create tension for the reader! It’s a very good piece of writing, you should be very proud of yourself! Well Done! Oh yeah, I think you could’ve used some commas. On the other hand, its a really good job! From Sara 🙂
Amazing poem Sophie. It really caught my attention. You created allot of tension and you have included atmosphere.
Keep Writing Amazing Stories And Poems. 🙂
Hello Sophia,
Your entry is the only one I have visited to have used poetic form. Well done.
What a tragic tale you have shared. A rainy night on a dark road is shattered by the crash of a low flying plane. Caught under the crashing plane, a small girl lies seriously injured, perhaps dead. The tale becomes even more tragic when you realise the small girl is your niece. Again, well done.
One advantage in using a poetic form of writing is you are able to be a little freer in your use of words. The verses need not rhyme but can carry great images for the reader although I can see you have attempted to use rhyme in places.
I hope you can continue entering the 100WC. It gives you the chance to share your ideas with the world.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
An amazing poem Sophia! I like how you used rhythm and atmospheric words to create tension for the reader! It’s a very good piece of writing, you should be very proud of yourself! Well Done! Oh yeah, I think you could’ve used some commas. On the other hand, its a really good job! From Sara 🙂
Amazing poem Sophie. It really caught my attention. You created allot of tension and you have included atmosphere.
Keep Writing Amazing Stories And Poems. 🙂
Ratheena ♥