Hello Abhinav,
I was immediately brought into your story by the wonderful setting that you created through your description of Downroad Street. You used details that appealed to the senses; creating the “gloomy, eerie” atmosphere for a suspensefulstory. You shocked the reader with the line “the silence was shattered with a squeal of a boy.” The following line foreshadows the despair of losing the child. I see how you leave the mystery up to the imagination of the reader to solve.
Irene
Thank you for your entry this week. What an outstanding piece of writing! Your smart selection of vocabulary has built a vivid picture in the reader’s mind and has made your story suspenseful. I really enjoyed reading this and will show my class to hopefully improve their writing!
Hello Abhinav,
I was immediately brought into your story by the wonderful setting that you created through your description of Downroad Street. You used details that appealed to the senses; creating the “gloomy, eerie” atmosphere for a suspensefulstory. You shocked the reader with the line “the silence was shattered with a squeal of a boy.” The following line foreshadows the despair of losing the child. I see how you leave the mystery up to the imagination of the reader to solve.
Irene
Hi Abhinav,
Thank you for your entry this week. What an outstanding piece of writing! Your smart selection of vocabulary has built a vivid picture in the reader’s mind and has made your story suspenseful. I really enjoyed reading this and will show my class to hopefully improve their writing!
Exceptional work!