A well crafted piece of writing, creating a sense of apprehension with the use of elipses. You have also moved the plot on well with: ‘The Next day dawned fair and bright…’ however, I am left feeling that I have missed the drama. It may have been a long and boring trip, but I want to feel that along with the narrating character. Take your reader with you.
Thank you for entering the challenge, each entry is so differently addressed.
A well crafted piece of writing, creating a sense of apprehension with the use of elipses. You have also moved the plot on well with: ‘The Next day dawned fair and bright…’ however, I am left feeling that I have missed the drama. It may have been a long and boring trip, but I want to feel that along with the narrating character. Take your reader with you.
Thank you for entering the challenge, each entry is so differently addressed.
~ Mrs Speirs (Team 100wc)
Very Dramatic story Jayanna. It really hooked me in with
Very Dramatic story Jayanna. It really hooked me in with the atmosphere you created. It was a great story and grabbed my attention.
Ratheena