This is a great piece of writing, Sachien.
I love the way you have set it out as diary entries.
You have created some really interesting snapshots of a strange place.
The repetition of ‘swish’ makes an impact and I like the use of ‘ inquisitive’ and ‘obedient’.
You end with a cliff-hanger and the reader wonders what happened next?
Keep writing for 100WC!
Good work Sachien! I liked all the vocabulary that you have used to make a good picture in my head. If the map was discovered many years ago, how could no one try to find what it lead to?
hi Sachien
AWESOME 100WC.
I like the description like 2It was time to aboard the nimble and agile aircraft.”
By Kool Krish
This is a great piece of writing, Sachien.
I love the way you have set it out as diary entries.
You have created some really interesting snapshots of a strange place.
The repetition of ‘swish’ makes an impact and I like the use of ‘ inquisitive’ and ‘obedient’.
You end with a cliff-hanger and the reader wonders what happened next?
Keep writing for 100WC!
I liked when you said one day later to tell us on which day each event happend
Good work Sachien! I liked all the vocabulary that you have used to make a good picture in my head. If the map was discovered many years ago, how could no one try to find what it lead to?
From Chetan