Oh my, how brave you are in this action-packed adventure story Esha, I really loved all your great vocabulary choices. Next time think about your sentence structures and try to vary them.
Miss A
Hi Harry, what an inventive story you have written. For me, I think your story started really well but became just a little muddled towards the end. Try and keep an eye on punctuation, specifically commas. Well done, great effort, I look forward to reading more from you 🙂
Oh my, how brave you are in this action-packed adventure story Esha, I really loved all your great vocabulary choices. Next time think about your sentence structures and try to vary them.
Miss A
Hi Harry, what an inventive story you have written. For me, I think your story started really well but became just a little muddled towards the end. Try and keep an eye on punctuation, specifically commas. Well done, great effort, I look forward to reading more from you 🙂