Well done on your entry this week.
Try to include some describing words in your story to help your reader imagine what your are writing about. For example you could describe the ‘place of peace’ and you could tell the reader more about the ‘obstacles’ that were put in your way.
I like the idea for an ultimate adventure. Perhaps writing about recovering the ultimate weapon would make another great story too.
Keep up the great work.
Ms. Brennock Team 100 W/C
Dublin, Ireland
I wish I was a Ninja I want to learn a spin kick.
Why do you want to be a ninja?
I want to be a ninja because I want to jump really high!
Well done on your entry this week.
Try to include some describing words in your story to help your reader imagine what your are writing about. For example you could describe the ‘place of peace’ and you could tell the reader more about the ‘obstacles’ that were put in your way.
I like the idea for an ultimate adventure. Perhaps writing about recovering the ultimate weapon would make another great story too.
Keep up the great work.
Ms. Brennock Team 100 W/C
Dublin, Ireland