What a creative use of your 100 words Noha. I wonder what will happen next and whether Lucy will find her way home? Your writing has certainly got my attention. Your use of vocabulary is lovely; words such as elegant, adores and beaming would suggest that you probably read a lot, so keep that up and you will develop even more vocabulary to use in your writing.
Remember to proof read your work afetr writing to check for small errors. See if you can spot and edit a small grammar error in the one but last sentence that begins ‘It led….’
A very Dandy way to express a story, Noha. It’s surprising that you fit all this into one hundred words. Nie use of words, and the fact that she got lost was scary. I like how you included opinions, and really used realism in this, as many of us struggle to say mm delicious when eating!
Keep Writing 🙂
~Imani~
What a creative use of your 100 words Noha. I wonder what will happen next and whether Lucy will find her way home? Your writing has certainly got my attention. Your use of vocabulary is lovely; words such as elegant, adores and beaming would suggest that you probably read a lot, so keep that up and you will develop even more vocabulary to use in your writing.
Remember to proof read your work afetr writing to check for small errors. See if you can spot and edit a small grammar error in the one but last sentence that begins ‘It led….’
Andy
(Year 6 teacher from Gloucester)
A very Dandy way to express a story, Noha. It’s surprising that you fit all this into one hundred words. Nie use of words, and the fact that she got lost was scary. I like how you included opinions, and really used realism in this, as many of us struggle to say mm delicious when eating!
Keep Writing 🙂
~Imani~