Hi Amina,
Thanks for sharing your story 100wc entry with the world. You have used a classic story and turned it in to your own through a few twists and alterations – well done. you have useda lot of short sentences which can be used really effectively to create drama but only if you use them every so often. I bet that you could find some connectives to link some of these together? I like the way you left it on a cliffhanger although I really want to know what time happens when next! Happy Easter and keep writing.☺
Hi Amina,
Thanks for sharing your story 100wc entry with the world. You have used a classic story and turned it in to your own through a few twists and alterations – well done. you have useda lot of short sentences which can be used really effectively to create drama but only if you use them every so often. I bet that you could find some connectives to link some of these together? I like the way you left it on a cliffhanger although I really want to know what time happens when next! Happy Easter and keep writing.☺
Thank you very much Dr D, hope you have a nice Easter too